What tools and strategies have humans used to change societies, organizations, and themselves in ways that make life better for themselves and others?

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We have worked together, over the course of a trying school year, to develop the skills you will need to
recognize the causes of the problems that you and your classmates face, and act on a plan to address and
(hopefully) eliminate those problems.
This assignment asks you to demonstrate your ability to identify problems of importance and to help
eliminate the negative consequences of those problems. More specifically, I ask that you compose a
thoughtful and much-improved revision to any unit assessment from this year. Your revisions should
demonstrate that your thinking is now more sophisticated and more supported with historical evidence
than in the original version.
The point of this exercise is to show me how your thinking has grown since last August.
FIRST — Select any one of this years assessments. Revise this project.
You are graded on how substantively you use the primary sources and historians texts from your chosen
unit to complete the project.
You may make any revisions, changes, edits, and/or additions you feel are needed. You may also cite
texts, concepts, or notes from any unit we covered this year.
Trimester 1 Trimester 2 Trimester 3
U0: Three Cups of Tea
Analysis Essay
U3: Inquisition Trials
Trial Analysis Essay
U6: Teishinkki
Diary Analysis Essay
U1: Gilgamesh
Podcast & Cited Transcript
U4: Ancient Greek Trials
Plato iBook & Sparknotes
U7: An Enemy of the People
Stakeholdership Play
U2: The Prince
Machiavellian Letter
U5: US Immigration Laws
Supreme Court Decision
SECOND Select any one of this years primary questions. Add a cited paragraph to the end of
your revised project that answers your chosen primary question.
Trimester 1 How do power and perspective shape which stories we tell, who is in the stories we tell,
and who is good/bad in the stories we tell?
Trimester 2 How do humans construct differences like race, sex, class, and gender across historical
time periods and geographic spaces?
Trimester 3 What tools and strategies have humans used to change societies, organizations, and
themselves in ways that make life better for themselves and others?

Rewritten part: Three Cups of Tea by Greg Mortonson and David Oliver Relin

The passage that I selected for this assessment is on page 34. The passage states, On the flight out of Islamabad he had felt so full of purpose, scheming a dozen different ways to raise money for the school. But back in Berkley, California, Greg Mortenson couldnt orient himself. He felt blotted out under the relentlessly sunny skies among prosperous college students strolling happily toward their next espresso, and his promise to Haji Ali felt more like a half-remembered movie hed dozed through on one of his three interminable flights.

This passage from Three Cups of Tea is the beginning of a problem. In the passage the reader can see that in the early stages of Mortensons master plan to build schools and better education for girls and all other students, he starts to run into his first problem. It is how he is going to get the funding so that he can carry out his plan. But where we see the very minimal agency come into play in this passage is on page 55. The passage that shows this level of agency states, So what, exactly, will your school cost? Hoerni barked. Mortenson fed more quarters into the phone. I met with an architect and a contractor in Shardu, and priced out all the materials, Mortenson said. I want it to have five rooms, four for classes, and one common room for- A number! Hoerni snapped. Twelve thousand dollars, Mortenson said nervously, but what-ever youd like to contribute toward- Is that all? Hoerni asked, incredulous. You’re not bullshitting? You can really build your school for twelve grand? yes sir, Mortenson said. He could hear his own heartbeat in his ears. Im sure of it. This passage is showing how Mortenson didnt have much agency when he was trying to get the funds for building schools. It shows that when Mortenson was talking to Hoerni, he was being questioned about if his facts were correct or if he was lying. It also shows that when Mortenson was talking about his designs for the school that Hoerni was bossing Mortenson around and telling him what to do. He was directing the conversation, and the author specifically stated that Hoemi snapped at Mortenson. So that shows that Mortenson clearly didnt have agency because people were questioning his judgement. This passage shows that the intention of these actions were meant for equality.

Mortenson in both passages was trying to figure out ways to get funding for his vision to build schools which would better the students’ education in the villages. And was also talking to Hoerni about funding his project so he could turn his vision into a reality. These passages target an issue. It is targeting an issue because this problem that Mortenson is facing and trying to solve is happening in several countries and not just to him and the villagers that he is working to help.

Some changes that Mortenson could make to ensure that what hes doing is more impactful is for the first passage to list the ideas and to check them off and look at the pros and the cons in the situation.

And also for the second passage he should be more confident when talking to potential lenders for his ideas. If he seems more confident then they will 100% believe him which will give him more agency.

Works cited page
On the flight out of Islamabad he had felt so full of purpose, scheming a dozen different ways to raise money for the school. But back in Berkley, California, Greg Mortenson couldnt orient himself. He felt blotted out under the relentlessly sunny skies among prosperous college students strolling happily toward their next espresso, and his promise to Haji Ali felt more like a half-remembered movie hed dozed through on one of his three interminable flights. was from page 34 from the book three cups of tea

So what, exactly, will your school cost? Hoerni barked. Mortenson fed more quarters into the phone. I met with an architect and a contractor in Shardu, and priced out all the materials, Mortenson said. I want it to have five rooms, four for classes, and one common room for- A number! Hoerni snapped. Twelve thousand dollars, Mortenson said nervously, but what-ever youd like to contribute toward- Is that all? Hoerni asked, incredulous. You’re not bullshitting? You can really build your school for twelve grand? yes sir, Mortenson said. He could hear his own heartbeat in his ears. Im sure of it. is on page 55 from the book three cups of tea