Are any sentences in need of further specification or clarification?

This is my dissertation overview. My adviser sent me feedback already:

Is the referent clear, or unclear? That is, when you use a particular word or phrase—for example, “this” or “the movement” or “the authors”—is the person or thing you’re referring to clear? Check to make sure the appropriate preposition is being used
Do any of the transitions between paragraphs need work?
Are there any issues with grammar or syntax that need addressing?
Are any sentences in need of further specification or clarification? Are there places where turning one sentence into two separate sentences might allow you to flesh out an idea more fully? Are there places where it would help to change or add a word?
Check to make sure the use of apostrophes is correct
Check to make sure the use of commas is correct and that no commas are missing

Last Completed Projects