Rhetorical Analysis Rough Draft

The expanded outline is attached. Use this as a reference. There is also some feedback from the expanded outline, please apply this to the first 2 pages of the rough draft.
The link to the story that is being used to the paper: https://www.ecoliteracy.org/article/wendell-berry-pleasures-eating
This is the feedback:
YAY for a secondary source as your hook–develop….pull a quote from Stern
INTEXT CITES: these are wrong. You’re using APA format. In English 1023, you’re required to use MLA citations from the MLA unit. Last name + page number only, never dates in MLA formatting intext. Works Cited citations are wrong, too–they’re APA format not MLA format.

Thesis–good so far.

Summary–this is a general overview–when you add this para to your paper, expand this paragraph, making sure you tell the whole story of her article.

**each device para needs TWO QUOTES each from Berry. Right now, you’re only giving one example. 2 each.

ETHOS: pull quotes that show he is an authority on the topic. For instance, he tells us that he gives speeches and people ask him for advice, etc. Quote B is AWESOME b/c it shows that he knows the right Q’s to ask.

PATHOS: give the quote for example A. Describe the steer standing in its own excrement. Explain how these quotes are making the reader feel, what emotion, and why that’s effective

LOGOS:well, both these are IMAGES: I would use these in the IMAGERY (fig lang) paragraph. Instead, use the quotes telling the “logic” of why we need to know about our food (it’s dangerous to our health, chemicals end up in our bodies, etc.)

FIG LANG: use the example A and B from the Logos para.

To take this from outline to draft, just start explaining HOW your quotes prove your devices, HOW they appeal to the reader to convince him/her.

Also, I’m reminding ALL students that this paper is 3 full pages (to the very bottom of the page) 4 full pages(maximum). If you find it difficult to achieve this length, consider (1) giving more than two examples per rhetorical device in your body paragraphs OR (2) adding a 5th rhetorical device.

Please know that your outline is just part of the process. An outline might look very different from your final draft, and that’s ok! You can change what points you use, what examples you use, etc.

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