What you provided in the outline is the only items that you should have used.

This request is to make changes/updates to the paper attached based on feedback from the instructor. I have also included the navy writing style guide PDF which includes information on 3PC.
-Requesting an additional 275 word minimum be added.
-if new sources are added, please use websites.
-Specific notes for changes/updates are as follows:

3PC (Intro/Transitions/Conclusion): This is roughly 20-25 points out of the 100, so it’s really important you get these things right. I not sure what you did with the Intro, but you went rogue on me. What you provided in the outline is the only items that you should have used. The AG shall only be 1-2 sentences, followed by the Motivation sentence, and finally the Overview sentence. You Overview sentence was missing MP3 in it. The Conclusion has an issue with the Re-Motivation sentence. Go back and look at what you provided for the outline on your last attempt.
Reference Page: You have a solid reference page going and just need to get the references listed in alphabetical order.
MP1 (Background): You have good information but I’m going to need some credible sources to back up the information you are saying.
MP2 (Evolution): This MP really starts off great and has supporting in-text citations to help. The last little bite of the MP does need a source.
MP3 (Importance): I would like to see this MP beefed up a little more as well. It’s really short and the Importance/Heritage piece is what we are really looking for with this essay.

You have a really solid starting point with these draft. The 3PC is a huge part of the essay and those items will need to be corrected to see where the essay actually stands on a grading scale and word count. You are definitely going to have to provided or input some more in-text citations with MP1 and MP2 and you are going to have to beef up MP3. Doing these things will ensure you are within the word count and meeting the objectives of the PE.

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