These are the big issues, about ideas, theme, organization, and developing paragraphs. These issues are best considered early on when you are writing, long before you begin proofreading or editing. What it is you want to say – and could it be said differently, more accurately, with a different organizational structure?

MAKE SURE TO CHECK WHAT IS WRITTEN ON THE BULLET BELOW. THERE ARE TWO REVISION STAGE.
Revision Stage 1: HOCs
HIGHER ORDER CONCERNS – These are the big issues, about ideas, theme, organization, and developing paragraphs. These issues are best considered early on when you are writing, long before you begin proofreading or editing. What it is you want to say – and could it be said differently, more accurately, with a different organizational structure?

Double-check your assignment sheet and any additional notes from class
Re-read the Prompt question to make sure you are you meeting the expectations of the assignment.
Consider your Theme (or main claim)
Does your Theme focus on a single Topic?
Does your Theme state what the stories are claiming about that Topic?
Your Audience of Readers:
Remember that you are writing for an audience of peers (such as yourself) who have not read Raymond Carver’s book.
This means you must always provide Context before quoting a passage, so your readers will at least know what’s going on in the scene
DO NOT SUMMARIZE each story. This will take up too much space and take away from the important part of your essay, which is the analysis. Giving context to a scene will be enough information for your readers
Your Body Paragraphs
Does your Topic sentence state clearly what literary element and/or short story you’re focusing on?
Do you develop that Topic sentence and explain in greater detail and more clearly what exactly you’re trying to show us in the story or through the literary element that connects to your Theme?
Do the Quotes you’ve chosen really support the Topic sentence? If not, what other Quote better supports your Topic?
MOST IMPORTANTLY do you explain to your readers how the Quote you chose supports the Theme of your essay? This is where your INTERPRETATION of the Quote should support the Theme you’ve chosen to focus on.
How are your body paragraphs organized? Is there a way you can organize them so your analysis builds from weakest to the strongest?
Concluding Observations
Considering the Theme you established as the focus of your paper, what, overall, do these short stories reveal to us that we often see regarding Love, or Marriage and Family, or Masculinity and Femininity, or Violence
Revision Stage 2: LOCs
LOWER ORDER CONCERNS – These are sentence-level and more detail-oriented issues in writing, especially related to grammar, sentence structure, and mechanics.
Clarity
Is the grammar and mechanics of the sentence making your point more confused and difficult to understand? Have someone read your paper and ask them to mark every sentence that’s not clear to them, then go back and figure out what you can add to make it clearer.
Get some distance so you can see what you’ve written with a fresh perspective
Double-space lines and print out your paper rather than reading it on the computer screen
Take a break; allow time between drafting and editing
Read your paper aloud to hear how it sounds
Make sure you’re Quotes are in proper MLA format, including page numbers

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